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TjorvenAuch ich möchte hier einige meiner Gedanken mit euch teilen. Über Feedback, Kritik, Anregungen etc. würde ich mich sehr freuen
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Tjorven

Zu dem folgenden Gedicht hat mich Kafkas 'Verwandlung' inspiriert. Ausschnitte aus dem Originaltext sind im Gedicht enthalten.


Deadly Loneliness

Bin ich ein Tier?
Eine traurige und ekelhafte Gestalt?
Geduldet, nichts als geduldet.

It seems to me there was a time – long, long ago
When I had friendship, even love
Now that seems like a dream from someone else’s life
When did you start despising me – I don’t remember
Why? - I don’t know
I have stopped asking
You call me ugly, and that’s what I’ve become
My soul a captive in this prison of skin and bones
If I have a soul at all
But if I hadn’t, how could I feel all this pain?
Yes, I do feel pain
Your sharp words hurt me like knives, and yet I long for every single one of them
Because sometimes you don’t even have words for me
Only tiny noises of disgust
A frown, the raising of a brow as I walk by
Looks full of loathing – If you look at me at all
I survive - On the egdes, nearly out of sight
Moving slowly, carefully, not to awaken your lethal fury
Still, also your cold indifference is killing me
Slowly, piece by piece
But maybe this is just what I deserve
I wish it was already over
I wish I was already
Gone

Er machte bald die Entdeckung, dass er sich nun überhaupt nicht mehr rühren konnte. Er wunderte sich darüber nicht, eher kam es ihm unnatürlich vor, dass er sich bis jetzt tatsächlich hatte fortbewegen können. Im übrigen fühlte er sich verhältnismässig behaglich. Er hatte zwar Schmerzen am ganzen Leib, aber ihm war, als würden sie almählich schwächer und schwächer und würden schliesslich ganz vergehen. Den Anfang des allgemeinen Hellerwerdens draussen vor dem Fenster erlebte er noch. Dann sank sein Kopf ohne seinen Willen gänzlich nieder, und aus seinen Nüstern strömte sein letzter Atem schwach hervor.[


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TjorvenDark Lullaby

Sleep well, my dear
Let me put you to rest
I will lay you down
in the black soil
Let it cover you, warm you
Protect you from all harm
The nightingale will sing you a lullaby
The wind whisper you goodnight
Don't be afraid, my dear
'cause I will be with you
Watch over you,
so nobody disturbs your sleep
I will set for you a stone
with your name carved out in letters of gold
I will plant for you a rose
And you will be in my heart
Forevermore

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TjorvenRestless

There are people everywhere
So many people
They all seem to know exactly where to go
All but me
They pass me by, but they don't see me
I am invisible, because I am a stranger to this town
I have forgotten where I came from, and I don't know where I am going
But action is the enemy of thought, and that's why I must keep on moving
Night is falling, and the streets grow silent
I am alone with the wind and the lights reflecting on the calm black water
Tiny snowflakes touch my skin and turn into drops of water that run down my face
I am tired and soaked to the skin, but still I keep on walking
My steps, my breath and my heartbeat become one
The rhythm that keeps me alive as long as I walk
The rhythm is all that I know
TjorvenSelf Portrait

Why do I have to see your face every time I look into the mirror?
You seem such a nice girl, a good friend, a loving mother and wife
But I know you better
You can't fool me with your innocent looks, your friendly smile, your lover's talk
'cause I can see what is behind
I know who you are, two-faced goddess of hypocrisy
Your words are like empty shells
Your smile a polished surface
Your love a promise that will never be kept
'cause you don't really feel anything at all
I cannot but despise you
you are so fuckin' vain, it makes me sick to even look at you
Now you tremble, for your know
your hour of punishment is near
My nails will pierce your skin, scratch your pretty face
My voice will haunt you, and you'll be begging for mercy in vain
'cause I am right here, inside of you
always
TjorvenDiesmal habe ich mich an einer Nachdichtung eines dänischen Gedichtes (Original von Tove Ditlevsen, 1943) versucht:

The Streeet of your Childhood

I am the street of your childhood
the root deep within your soul
I am the living rhythm
in everything you’re longing for
I am your mother’s busy hands
and your father’s troubled mind
The light and silvery cobweb
of your very first dreams entwined

Your first heartache you shared with me
on a cold and rainy day
I gave you my own great earnestness
and a bit of melancholy
I wanted to make your heart tough
that’s why I struck you right in your face
but then I helped you get back to your feet again
and wiped your tears away

It was me who taught you to hate
to mock, to hurt and to fight
I gave you the strongest weapons
you must learn how to use them right
I have made your eyes watchful, I’ll always find them again
if you meet someone with the same look in his eyes
you’ll know that he’s your true friend

And when you hear beautiful voices
singing in harmony
you’ll be longing for the sound of my voice,
rough as it used to be
Have you travelled oh so far?
Have you left your oldest friend? -
I am the street of your childhood – I’ll always find you again
TjorvenUnd hier noch einGedicht das ein wenig aus dem Rahmen fällt weil auf deutsch und weniger düster als die meisten anderen:

Sommertage

Sommer
Unbeschwerte Tage voller Wärme und Lichtgeflimmer
Aufgereiht wie bunte Perlen auf einer Schnur
Der Sommer trägt Ohrringe aus Zwillingskirschen,
einen Löwenzahnkranz im Haar
und schmeckt nach Erdbeeren und Sauerampfer

Dieser Tag ein ganzes Leben,
Süsse, unentdeckte Welt
Sonne auf meiner Haut
Nackte Füsse auf feuchtem Gras und heissem Asphalt
Fliederduft, das geschäftige Summen der Insekten
Wogendes Seegras und zielstrebig dahineilende Krabben
Beobachtet durch das Glas der Taucherbrille

Surrende Mücken, Abenddämmerung über einem See
Sein stilles, kühles Wasser umgibt mich
Donner und rauschender Sommerregen
Der würzige Geruch von feuchter Erde
Mittsommerfeuer
Die weissen Nächte des Nordens
Die süsse Last eines schlafenden Babys in meinem Arm,
Sein flaumig weiches Haar an meiner Wange

Ein kleines Mädchen an der Reling eines Dampfers
Wind in ihrem Haar,
Möwen schreien, Gischt spritzt um sie her
„Schau!“ ruft sie mit leuchtenden Augen. „Schau!“
Doch ob es meine Stimme ist oder die meines Kindes, vermag ich nicht zu sagen
Vergangenheit und Gegenwart, Erleben und Erinnerung
Werden eins im pulsierenden Rhythmus des Lebens
Mit jeder Faser meines Wesens spüre ich die ungestüme Freude:
„Ich lebe! Ich bin!“
Ich sauge das Mark des Lebens in mich auf
Leere bis zur Neige das Füllhorn, das der Sommer mir reicht
TjorvenHab mich wieder mal an einem Songtext vergriffen - das Original ist von [URL=http://www.larcsix.de]L'Arc Six[/URL]

Und hier ist nun meine Version - meinem Mann gewidmet

Hope

See this girl, she used to walk with her head down
Too shy and too afraid to meet anyone's eye
But now she's dancing wild and free, the music is loud
And she is smiling at him as he whirls her around

And she's walking with hope in her shoes
Knowing there's nothing she can lose

See this man, he used to sit on his own
Went out into the world but never found a home
Now he's walking through the night, humming to himself
His steps are light because he knows that he'll see her again

And he's walking with hope in his shoes
Knowing there's nothing he can lose

See this pair, they don't seem much alike
They come from two different worlds, a thousand miles apart
And yet they share every day, walking side by side
The road that lies before them is open and wide

And they're walking with hope in their shoes
Knowing there's nothing they can lose
TjorvenWhat remains

The trace of a touch
The echo of a kind word
The shadow of a loving glance
Tiny reflections of light
on the dull grey surface of habituality
A lonely, stray note from a dancing tune
Left behind in the never ceasing rhythm of working days
These are the remains of a love
TjorvenMemories of Love

What must I do
before you look at me again?
What can I say
to make you listen?
Who should I be
so you can love me?
Was it all just a dream,
a mere illusuion?
The tender glance I once saw in your eyes
The soft words you spoke to me
The gentle touch of your hand that I remember so well
Where has it gone, my friend?
I do not know
Now all I have are memories

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